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= may I suggest
Corina Gina Papouis
[12.Oct.09 23:41]
a few changes? hope you don't mind...
replacing:
'purely a blasted conches' with
'just broken shells'

and

'that time' with
'then'

i would also cut 'a' from 'a sand' to avoid repetition from 'a vortex'...

and last (but not least:) please correct signe (no e)...although i am thinking, having read the Romanian version, would you also consider 'in site' rather than 'inside'?

Best wishes,
Corina
= Workshop
George Paºa
[13.Oct.09 21:33]
Thanks, Corina! Initially, in the second verse was this form: „just broken shells”. „Sign”, of course! „Signe” is a french version. Maybe, english version of „volute” is illogical (a workshop, a blue workshop!).

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= may I suggest	Corina Gina Papouis [12.Oct.09 23:41]
a few changes? hope you don't mind... replacing: 'purely a blasted conches' with 'just broken shells' and 'that time' with 'then' i would also cut 'a' from 'a sand' to avoid repetition from 'a vortex'... and last (but not least:) please correct signe (no e)...although i am thinking, having read the Romanian version, would you also consider 'in site' rather than 'inside'? Best wishes, Corina

= Workshop	George Paºa [13.Oct.09 21:33]
Thanks, Corina! Initially, in the second verse was this form: „just broken shells”. „Sign”, of course! „Signe” is a french version. Maybe, english version of „volute” is illogical (a workshop, a blue workshop!).